Wednesday 12 March 2014

The evil toilet




Once upon a time there lived a girl. She moved into a house with a evil toilet. No one knew that the toilet was evil. At midnight the girl went toilet. But when she lift the toilet lid the toilet ate her. She never came out. ... The girl's father went toilet he lift the toilet lid Flush he was a goner. The girl's mother went to the toilet you know what happened she was died. The girl's sister went to the toilet... The toilet was a monster. No one ever lived in that house ever again. It very was very sad they died.  

4 comments:

  1. Wow great story I hope I never move in to a house with an evil toilet
    Connor
    Ross intermediate

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  2. Hi a like your story but you made some mistakes that you should fix the words

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  3. Hi I like your story but there was one mistake you said she was died instead of she died. I also like to think of the positives and my positive side about this i thought it was a really cool story.
    Wiremu Lipsham
    Ross intermediate

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  4. The story was quite a twist when everyone died!
    Well done with the story :)
    Victoria 8B SHS

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