Sunday, 23 February 2014

Shadow guards defend

As I was sprinting through the dark hall way avoiding the ghostly shadow guards of my haunted green  floating house they had bright shining light trying to blind me so I dodged the beam. I jumped  to the house SLAM! I slammed the door as hard as I could chopping a shadow guards hand off the hand was casing me I ran into my room grabbed my purple ghost spray and sprayed the hand POOF it was goon in a tick. Woof that almost got me. I ran to Hailies room to tell her the news she was so frightened.
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3 comments:

  1. Anonymous23 February 2014 at 20:13

    An interesting story, there are a lot of descriptive words well done.

    Jenna Henry
    Room 14 - 1 4 All
    Ross Intermediate

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  2. Anonymous23 February 2014 at 22:58

    Very clever story with lots of punctuation.
    Grace
    Room 14
    Ross Intermediate

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  3. Unknown24 February 2014 at 21:51

    Thank you Grace for your specific comment. We have used this as a 'Model' of good commenting.
    Miss Turner
    Room B Teacher

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